Spoiler Hey, this is the first draft of my first story, any criticism and feedback would be appreciated before I do a finalised version

  [colpse]Early dawn sunlight trickled in through a slightly blinded curtain to an upstairs bedroom window, gently caressing the face of a young man who was currently resting in bed from a drinking party the previous night by 'socialising' with his colleagues. Suddenly, a blearing arm breaks out wailing a head-thumping tune causing this young man tily stir from his deep dreams.

  Sitting up slowly with a headache indug hangover, he stretches his left palm smming the off button on the noisy arm before catg his bearings.

  "Ugh."

  Wiping the dust from his eyes, he zily slinks out of bed whilst taking in his surroundings trying to remember how he got back from the socialising work night out.

  Seems one of my co-workers hailed a cab ensuring I got back safe. He muses inwardly thinking on who would be niough to do so.

  Making his way out of the bedroom he goes across the hallway into the bathroom to wash up his fa cold water from the sink basin to wake himself up from the hangover. Looking into the mirror in front of him he saw reflected back a young shaven man with little to no stubble and pierg o blue eyes staring back at him, with hazel brown hair and face dripping with chilling water droplets as they fall into the sink. Leaning back, he catches glimpses of his broadened shoulders and slight muscle definitioing slightly lost in a trance before he hears loud thumps ohroom door.

  THUMP THUMP

  "hey! when your finished up e downstairs, yirlfriends waiting for you." A slightly muffled voice was heard from the doors dire before hearing footfalls slowly disappearing in the distance. huh, my sister seems agitated this m.

  Drying up and messing his hair he walked out of the bathroom bato his bedroom log his drawer pulling out a ruffled yet bck t-shirt which he promptly wears before heading downstairs into the kit where there was a flurry of a going on. I he saw his older sister sitting down by the table scrolling through her phoh a disgruntled expression whilst two other dies were preparing breakfast.

  "Ah, Lumian, you go and grab the cutlery please?" came a motherly and soothing voiced question proposed by the elder of the two without looking behind her back.

  "Yes Mom." Lumian answered before heading to where the cutlery were hidden. Whilst preparing the cutlery oable he took a moment to gaze at his girlfriend of five years, Camil. She was short at around five foot five, with long bck glossy hair reag the middle of her back. She was of a slim build with a bit of a curve to her lower bad jade-like pale skin. She wore a browher jacket above a white tank top and a red skirt sitting just above the ko her bare silk smooth legs.

  Camil turned her head to the side revealing luscious red stained lips lifting into a curved smile while brushing her hair behind her ear giving Lumian a smoky gaze. "Hey, m babe, get seated as breakfast is nearly ready." She says in a rather geone, her emerald green eyes pointing to the seat just in front of him.

  "sure thing dear." Lumian replies before wing again from the headache. I really o grab some medie soon to help after having breakfast.

  Slowly sitting down in front of his sister he looks into her dire notig that she was having a look of anger and annoyance slowly crawl into her blue eyes as she stared down into her phone. She had a button h her lips drawn into a thin line, with dark brown hair cut short to her shoulders with blonde highlights at the hair tips.

  "Did you finally get the highlights that you wanted Lisa?" Lumian asked in half wanting to temporarily distract his sister from growing in anger and half genuine curiosity.

  Looking up from her phone, Lisa huffed before replying "Finally, someone fug noticed uhat son-of-a bitch Johnathan." Oh it seems that jerk has done something to upset sis again, I bet it is him that she's arguing with on the phone... I really don't want to get into this with my headache right now.

  "Language at the table dear." My mom says while dishing up a full English breakfast onto the ptes for Camil t forth onto the table. Mom was the splitting image of my older sister despite being older, you would have thought that they were twins from a distance despite having some signs of age showing in her skin.

  "Well, I think you look stunning." Lumian replied in a geoo try and dispel some of his sisters anger and started to dig into breakfast.

  His mother Melissa and Camil then sit down at the table beside them and start a versatioween them as they want to catch up with each other. As they tio verse Lumian starts getting lost in thought perhaps influenced by the slowly dying out headache. Last night ain especially Hailey and Jennifer enting on what makes a 'real man' and that ag in any other way be sidered gay. "- So what do you think Dear?" A question cutting through the depressive line of thought asked by Camil while looking in my dire.

  "Uh... Sorry I wasn't paying attentioo a headache from this m do you miing that?" Lumian replied in a sheepish tone.

  "Jeez, always so scatter-brained I asked what you thought about me dying some red streaks into my bck hair with freshly painted red nails?" Camil rolling her eyes asked again before smiling and wanting my input.

  I closed my eyes and imagined my girlfriend wearing differing shades of red before opening my eyes and looking in her dire and saying "I believe you would look good in blood red rather than a dark red as that would be difficult to differentiate and blood red would stand out honey."

  As we tihe versation I noticed that outside was starting to get dark through the windows with trees bending frusts of wind. Hmm that shouldn't be happening, the forecast says that it at most would be cloudy ter in the evening. The fences rattled with further gusts of wind before a- BOOM CRACK -loud thunderous sound was heard.

  "Huh what was that?" Lisa called out looking up from her phone befng through the window as everyone else stopped eating to look that way as well.

  "What's going o-" Melissa was about to ask something in before a massive fsh ht light suddenly bsted lighting up our retinas as I closed my eyes tightly trying to remove as much of the fsh as I .

  Slowly opening my eyes I see an endless expanse of a white void. After slowly taking it all in I realize there are no others here. No others here? where are they? mom? sis? Honey? I was slowly starting to bee frantic before I heard a buzzing in my ears.

  Bzz...SEARG...EG...Bzz crackle...ECTED...VERIFYING...VERIFIED...crackle.

  I don't know this nguage yet, ... I uand it? what the fuck is going on? am I dreaming still?

  "You are not dreaming mortal named Lumian." A sudden voice from the void called out to me causio look into the voices general dire leadio gaze upon ahat retly appeared quietly out of thin air only, this other was only a general outlih no true definiures nearly as bnk as this void. "You and your family are safe, only temporarily separated to deal with individually on a oo-one basis."

  "Who- No, what are you? you send us back? what happened?" I try to question this being while holding in my inner fears, worries and panic even though I feel that it see through me even without its features of eyes.

  "My name is not important just know that I am a deity, one amongst many who require you in our world to help develop its dire and no we are incapable of sending you baatter how much you plead, beg or try and defy in anger."

  What... so we t...shit. "Then what will happen to us now?" I ask through slightly gritted teeth and holding back slight tears thinking back to everything that will be left behind.

  A disdaining tone in the voiswered with a hint of amusement "You are bei down into a new world that has stagnated beyond reason and therefore, must bring ge no matter what form it es in... also, your current body is unsuitable for this new world thus requires adva and ge."

  "Wh-what do you mean ge? advao my abilities, hey answer me!" I question slightly under my breath before realizing my body slowly disappearing out of existence.

  "Goodbye mortal." That desding voice being the st I hear before another fsh of light causes me to bnk out.